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Chapter 28: You are amazing! You figured this out at first glance!

Chapter 28 You are amazing! You figured this out at a glance! "Tell me what's lacking." Su Nuo hurriedly urged Lu Hongxuan. "Don't worry about the three outline topics. Just tell me what's lacking in the plot of these four chapters." "You wrote these four chapters very well." Su Nuo wrote about the hero and heroine going to Yulang Mountain to look for magic herbs and treasures. There are piranhas in the river of Yulang Mountain, and then there is Feilong Mountain, and there is a giant python in Feilong Mountain. The plot of everyone fighting the giant python is also very well written. Then there is the Ice and Snow Valley, and the description of the Ice and Snow Valley is also very good. The descriptions of the magic pills and magic herbs are very vivid. "It's well written, but the character dialogues seem to be lacking a bit, and this needs to be strengthened." Lu Hongxuan said honestly. "You are amazing! You figured this out at a glance!" Su Nuo didn't expect Lu Hongxuan to be able to see her shortcomings right away. She was indeed not good at describing the tone and expression of characters' dialogues. She had read many books before and specialized in learning how to describe characters' dialogues. But now she still felt that she was lacking. Lu Hongxuan thought that Su Nuo would refute what he said. Unexpectedly, he heard Su Nuo praising him. He was immediately very happy. "Tell me about some of the tones and expressions of speaking that you think are good, and I'll write them down." Su Nuo immediately opened the document, intending to listen to Lu Hongxuan's description. Lu Hongxuan expressed what he thought were some of the characters' conversation habits and tones. Sunuo wrote it all down and saved it in the document. "For other information, you can search online, or read some famous books or popular books that describe this aspect."

"Okay! It's getting late, you should go to bed." Su Nuo looked at the time, it was :. It was almost one o'clock. He hurriedly urged Lu Hongxuan to go to bed. "I'll go to bed at one o'clock. I'll stay with you for a while!" In the past, it was Su Nuo who asked Lu Hongxuan to accompany her until a certain time every day, but now it is Lu Hongxuan who takes the initiative to accompany Su Nuo. "Okay!" Su Nuo was very happy to hear what Lu Hongxuan said. Although she was very considerate of him now, it would be better if he could stay with her for a while longer. "It's cold now, you have to take care of yourself. Don't catch a cold!" Su Nuo said with concern. "Well, it's okay. I exercise every day and rarely catch a cold." Lu Hongxuan said proudly. "Unlike you, you don't exercise every day and always catch a cold once a month. Each cold lasts for a week. This is due to lack of exercise. When you come here in the future, I will definitely take you to exercise." "I don't exercise..." Su Nuo quickly refused when she heard Lu Hongxuan's words. "I won't catch a cold if I stay up late less now!" Su Nuo doesn't like to exercise, rarely runs or does exercise, and doesn't like shopping. Every time she goes shopping with her girlfriends, she looks like she has lost all hope in life. Because she can't understand the feeling of walking through hundreds of stores but only buying one or two things. In her opinion, just buy whatever you like. When her girlfriends buy things, they will walk around and choose more, and try them on when they see something suitable. Sometimes they will try on seven or eight pieces before buying one or two. They enjoy the fun of shopping. Anyway, every time Sunuo goes out shopping, she feels very tired, but her girlfriends think it is worth it. "You must exercise. Only by exercising can your body be healthy and you won't catch colds all the time!" Lu Hongxuan felt that Su Nuo had some bad habits in her life, and he must find a way to help her correct them. (End of this chapter)

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